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i'm used to
taking orders.

periodically
i'll call my dad "mom"
or my mom "dad"
solely because the things
they say run together like
yolks and yellow paint --
only half of it i can
swallow.

so when you told me to
shut up and take it, i
obliged.
because that's
exactly what i do.

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occurred to me earlier today,
when i almost called dad "mom"
again.

silly me.

remark: this doesn't feel finished.
any suggestions?
:blackrose:

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:iconblissfully-oblivious:
I really love this part of the second stanza:
". . . the things
they say run together like
yolks and yellow paint --
only half of it i can
swallow."

It just really struck me as completely brilliant.
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~little-supernova Mar 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness, I was just sitting there thinking "how are yolks and yellow paint different?" and suddenly it hit me -- one's edible and the other's not, so I wrote that in. I thought it was pretty nice, too. Thanks for noticing.
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